Comments on: “Rheumatoid Arthritis sufferer gets relief, support” (Laurence Stacey)

By: Laurence Stacey-Editor

Laurence Stacey-Editor — Mon, 30 Nov 2009 21:59:13 +0000

Thanks guys! Sorry it took me awhile to respond. I was visiting family in Florida for Thanksgiving break and had no real internet access. These are some stellar readings. I’m really glad that the structure worked here as I was trying to experiment a little with the placement of the pivot point.

By: Dick Whyte

Dick Whyte — Wed, 25 Nov 2009 23:03:03 +0000

Thirded. This poem is just stunning. I loved it when I first read it, and I love it even more now. And I agree with Chen-ou, the poetry is made in the second line (and overflows through the whole poem).

By: Paul Smith

Paul Smith — Wed, 25 Nov 2009 22:05:53 +0000

I second what Chen-ou said, this is a very powerful poem Laurence, that unravels at just the right pace.

By: Chen-ou Liu

Chen-ou Liu — Wed, 25 Nov 2009 20:41:13 +0000

The poem is subtly structured with a deep emotional undercurrent. The second line has the most weight.

Laurence, a riveting read. Thanks for sharing.

Chen-ou