“Record cold, early snow grip Prairies on Thanksgiving” (Chen-ou Liu)

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snowflakes
falling upon snowflakes
upon snowflakes…

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Headlines:

“Record cold, early snow grip Prairies on Thanksgiving” (CBC News)

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Poem by Chen-ou Liu (see poet biographies). Read more by this poet.

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  1. Paul Smith

    I absolutely love this poem. So simple, so profound!

  2. Chen-ou Liu

    Paul, thanks for your kind words. Much appreciated.

    Chen-ou

  3. Laurence Stacey-Editor

    I agree, this is stellar!

  4. Editor

    Me three! This poem has it going on!!! Great work Chen-ou.

  5. Chen-ou Liu

    Laurence and Dick,

    I try to employ an element of repetition in my haiku to see if it works well.

    Many thanks for your encouraging comments.

    Chen-ou

  6. Editor

    Repetition is also one of my favourite techniques in haiku. When used properly it has a wonderful effect (a kind of doubling up exponentially to create an endlessness, not unlike the Western concept of the “sublime”).

  7. Chen-ou Liu

    Hi! Dick:

    “Western concept of the ‘sublime’”

    Kantian sublime? Kant identifies the sublime with a quantity, and that quantity is unlimited.

    Chen-ou

  8. Dick Whyte

    Yeah – that is what I was getting at – the repetition heads toward infinity and creates a sense of the unlimited (or endlessness). It does this by suggesting that the repetition goes on forever (unlimited repetition). Hence, I can read your poem as:

    snowflakes
    falling upon snowflakes
    upon snowflakes…
    falling upon snowflakes
    upon snowflakes…
    falling upon snowflakes
    upon snowflakes…
    falling upon snowflakes
    upon snowflakes…
    falling upon snowflakes
    upon snowflakes…

    (and so on – toward the limitless)

    This is the way I see repetition working in haiku as a structure.

    Any thoughts?

  9. Chen-ou Liu

    Dick,

    You grasped the complete meaning of my poem. You co-authored it.
    Many thanks!

    Chen-ou

  10. Dick Whyte

    I dunno about co-authoring. I think I just drew out the implications of your poem that were there from the beginning. I also think it would have had this effect in three lines (as we published it) or in one line (as you originally submitted it). Great poem man. We look forward to seeing more.

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